I will never forget my first time to take part in the club. The club which I join is a Christian association. They would hold some service characteristic activities. For example, singing songs for elder peoples in age's home, holding charity sale and other charity shows. During activities, I learn lots of things and experience. First, I was familiar with my team members by playing games together and making many new friends. Second, I understand that teamwork is also important in the team. We usually hold some activities and think some surprising ideas together too.
I learning that to give is better than to gain. It is unforgettable thing to me that being one member in this club.
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1. I can clearly understand your topic sentences but I kind of not sure where the topic sentence would lead the story to. 2. I think the story is very interesting and it shows the writer is a very warm heart person and willing to helps. 3. The conclusion is fantastic, I really like how you phrased your conclusion. :) p.s. instead of age house, you could use the word nursing home.
你的主題句很清楚地讓我知道你要說甚麼 你的故事內容很有愛心跟溫暖我很喜歡 結論句說得很好,用詞我非常喜歡喔
主題句很清楚可以知道整個故事接下來的走向 故事很有趣喔也能讓人感受到你的溫暖和愛你 結尾用得很好喔很完整也讓人覺得整篇文章很有厚度 我很喜歡~
主題句寫得很明確!!且立刻詳細描述自己在教會中學到的經驗跟認識的朋友,讀起來一氣呵成,很喜歡這種簡單的文章,看起來沒有負擔!／結論句有獨立出來並且為文章下個句點,會使人看完文章也想進入教會看看